Friday, 14 September 2007

CENTRAL MOOD

descriptive patterns

Try to continue these descriptions according to its pattern & detect mistakes by highlighting them.


Every time he heard the song entitled 'Bukan Diriku', he found himself at his past time. He hate being in this condition but as a human being, he can't lie to himself that he is really frusterated with his ex-girlfriend, Salina. She dump him just because of other guy. Even he is willing for letting her to go, yet his heart still hurt. just because to see his beloved one live happily, he sacrifice his own happiness. From outside he seems to be so tough but in contrast, his heart always crying and still hoping that Salina will come back onto his life.

5 comments:

chocolate said...

I have been found one incorrect spelling that is frusterated. It's suppose to be frustrated.Can I try to continue this essay???
Eventhough, he tried to found someone special to replace Salina position in his heart but he can't. He tried to throw away all the sweet memories with Salina far from himself but as he want, the memories always bother him especially in his dream...... I hope miss afzan can check my grammar because I'm very lack in grammar....huhu....

Anonymous said...

thanks for ur comment...

strawberry shortcake said...

I can clearly see that there is a mechanic mistake when the essay is written 'just' at the early sentence not in proper way. Capital letter of 'J' should be used. This may not be significant for certain people but for me it is. The writer also mixed up past tenses and present tenses. Come on, be sure of yourself. Overall, this essay is truly interesting if you can continue writing till the end. That's all from me!!!

dr_love said...

>>>>i'm gonna continue this passage.............everytime he looked at the photo of his ex-girlfriend, he had his tears rolling over his cheeks. He could not forget about the pretty and kind-hearted woman that he madly, truly and deeply loved since 2 years ago. Although he tried to erase all his oozing love for Salina, he failed. He threw away all the things left by Salina but the memories he had with her were still fresh in mind. His days were getting to be so dull. Everything he did seemed to be wrong. Everything he did reminded him of her. Salina's face was always lingering in her serebrum.>>>>>> is my writing okay?<<<<<<<<<

U13 said...

spelling mistake-frusterated. It should be frustrated.

..Suddenly,he realizes that Salina in not the only person who can makes him happy.He needs to appreciate his life because his journey is still long.He tries to forget the past and lives in his new life peacefully.